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Post by Candy Crush on May 14, 2014 4:12:34 GMT -5
Dear Mr. Virtanen
I would like to invite you to the launch of the Nintendo Proyect Zero 2: Wii Edition; on Friday 23 May 2014 at Tampere Talo. Proyecto Zero 2 is the continue of the classic japanese horror game released in 2004.
The evening will start with a drinks reception from 18:30. Followed by the Proyect Zero 2 presentation at 19:00. After you can play the game.
Please, we would be appreciate your RSVP no later than Tuesday 20 May to events@nintendo.com
Best wishes
Nintendo
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Post by Email Expert on May 14, 2014 6:09:06 GMT -5
Dear Candy
thank you for your email. I will give my comments in a few days time.
Best regards Email Expert
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Post by Ritva Paivomaa on May 19, 2014 4:00:14 GMT -5
Email Expert comments: Dear Candy your invitation email is very good as it is: fluent, matter-of-fact and polite. I have made a few changes but many of them are matters of taste. I made my feedback into a small 'lesson' on letter and email writing in my reply to Mr Journeyman. I would also like you to have a look at that. With it I wish to point out how well structured your invitation email was. Best regards Email Expert In addition to the 'lesson' in my reply to Mr Journeyman, I would like to mention the following things: SALUTATION Dear Mr. Virtanen: AmE Dear Mr Virtanen BrE I opted for the BrE because your DATE was in BrE 23 May 2014 BrE May 23, 2014 AmE SPOTPA (subjekti – predikaatti – objekti – tapa – paikka – aika). That's why I changed the order in 'at Tampere Hall on Fri....'. Tampere Talo; the 'official' name in English seems to be Tampere Hall For more guidelines and models on invitations, google 'invitation guidelines'. Dear Mr Virtanen I would like to invite you to the launch of the Nintendo Proyect Zero 2: Wii Edition. Proyecto Zero 2 is a continuation of the classic Japanese horror game released in 2004. The launch will take place at Tampere Hall on Friday 23 May 2014. The evening will start with a drinks reception at 18:30, followed by the Proyect Zero 2 presentation at 19:00. After that you can play the game. We would appreciate your RSVP no later than Tuesday 20 May to events@nintendo.com Best wishes Nintendo
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